Linh's Argumentation Checked By Thinh

Name: Pham Thi Thuy Linh

Date: 02/05/2009

Class: E1-K41 WRITING ASSIGNMENT – WEEK 12 (The first version) Topic: Trial Marriage: For or Against Outline: I. Introduction TS: However, that prevalent phenomenon has been dogged by controversy because of its related problems. II. Body 1. A feeling of insecurities 2. Illegitimate children 3. Cons + Refutations

III. Conclusion RS: Feeling insecure in both two people and creating miserably unofficial children are the most two big problems surrounding trial marriage. Essay: People are becoming more and more open-minded and have individual freedom to love and to be loved without becoming a burden to the other. Living together before marriage is no longer regarded as a revolutionary behavior, especially among the young blood. However, that prevalent phenomenon has been dogged by controversy because of its related problems. A feeling of insecurities is easily recognized in trial marriage. Two people do not have any legal tie with each other, which is the root of all the following problems. They are always threatened by the third person. To be not allowed to question or complain, their suspicions further fueled whenever slightest differences arise. Hence, they are easily irritated, angry or nervous, and finally, end up with a miserable life. If they have conjugal properties when they live together, make a claim of share is another complicated matter. It will be more stressful and heart breaking experience for both of them. Illegitimate children will be the direct victims suffered from this situation. Firstly, they do not have the right to bring the name of their fathers. Going to school, therefore, they will be teased mercilessly by their friends because they are born out of wedlock. Absolutely feel embarrassed, their emotional life is likely to be affected. Moreover, their family, future and inheritance are not secured. It is not certain whether they will receive any support from fathers if their parents are separated. Moreover, the devastating consequences are proven to follow from

parents’ separation, while in fact, Western statistics show that people with cohabitation are more likely to divorce than people who did not live together before getting married. Some people claim that trial marriage is a good way for the couple to learn more about each other and have better adjustments before tying the knot. However, one may pretend to be perfect, it seems like you have exactly what you are looking for all years. But the truth might be shocking in many ways for his/her unbearable aspects. Demerits would be exposed completely after cohabitation, and then it leads to a tragic ending. Anything can be tried before we make up our mind, except marriage. Marriage is holy and any try of it is a violation of marriage rules. Feeling insecure in both two people and creating miserably unofficial children are the most two big problems surrounding trial marriage. (394 words) Comments: 

I am afraid of say this: your essay seems not to live up to my expectation as it should be. In other words, it is not persuasive enough for me to give up the decision of trying cohabitation. (a cohabitation supporter   just kidding!)

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About your ideas: I think illegitimate children can be seen as an disadvantage of cohabitation. However, when I read your supporting sentences, I think they are not so good: the child will not have his father surname? But in fact, some of the couples will get married afterwards while the others will decide to have the abortion. Hence, talking about abortion, you may have more convincing ideas to support the idea, I think.

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Some mistakes as I have mentioned above.  Hope these comments help!!! Peer editor: Nguyen Thi Thinh