Peer Edit Essay 1

GOOD What is the thesis statement? Is it too broad? Too general? Title and sentences capitalized? Complete sentences (Does not start a sentence with: and, but, so, because)? Are there 5 paragraphs? Are the paragraph at least 6 sentences long? Are there 3 supporting points? Do the supporting points have details? Does the conclusion have a sentence that rephrases the thesis? Does the conclusion have a summary of the supporting points? What types of sentences (simple, complex, compound)? Is there good spelling? BETTER Does it have a good hook? Really? Yes / No. What was used (minimum 2)? Surprise Quotation Shared Memory Story Imaginary Question Situation Does the hook CONNECT with the THESIS? Body ParagraphsDoes each paragraph have a good REASON (supporting point)? What details are used? Where? Anecdotes (stories) Facts Quotations Examples Opinions Statistics Are the details good and interesting? Or are they boring? What transition words are used? Are all the sentences good idea groups? Or do some of the sentences need to be combined? BEST What is the counter-argument in paragraph 4? What are the REASONS for the counter-argument? What supporting point (#3) “fights” the counter-argument? What details help in the fight? ****Are all the details in the BODY credible? Why or why not? Do all the details show and not tell? Do all the details “hook” the head and the heart? Why is the conclusion memorable/emotional? What was used? a quotation a prediction a recommendation an anecdote a solution a call to action What was the best part of this essay? What part needs help?