Personal Essay 3

Personal Essay 3 By: Dallen Bigler I think a personal essay is an essay about yourself. It should also be about your own personal experiences and how you have solved them or how you are going to solve them. A quilty/skill I am very good at is athleticism. I remember the first sport I played was t-ball. I remember I played with a lot of people in my neighborhood and a lot of my friends. We had to hit the ball off a pole and run. When we hit we would always run the other direction to third instead of first. The next sport I played for many of years was basketball. Basketball is my favourite sport. When I played basketball for Jr. Jazz I played with many teams. I also learned many new things from all of the new coaches I played for. My last team I played for from Jr. Jazz was the best team I played on. Every game we played we won. My coach let us start a league for West Jordan. When in that league we never won a game. I only played for the West Jordan league for one year. Another sport I played was flag football. In that sport my team was good. In the first game I got the first touchdown. We played a lot of the same teams because a lot of people didn’t play that year. In the end it was all fun and we had a lot of great games. Right now I play volleyball for my class. When it comes to Grizzly Opts I go to the gym and shoot hoops and play scrimmage basketball games. In school Im taking a lot of sports classes like two team sports classes, volleyball class,and two basketball classes. In the team sports classes I have played pickleball, volleyball, flag football,and softball. When it comes to free days I play volleyball and basketball. When playing sports I have made many friends and long lasting impressions on them.

My revision process was to get rid of some more detail because I think I had too much detail. Some of the hard choices I had to make was get rid of a lot of detail on the sports I played growing up and also some of the things that had happened to me and my team mates. I made these decisions because I had to get to 300 words + and -. The things I kept were the different sports and how I played them. I am worried about the details i cut to make the essay short enough. I think the 300 word essay is stronger because it goes straight to the point and makes more sense to understand.