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Logical Vocabulary Vocabulary Proposition T or F in an argument, but not alone. Can be a premise or conclusion. Is not equal to a sentence. Premise Proposition used as evidence in an argument. Conclusion Proposition used as a thesis in an argument. Argument A group of propositions of which one is claimed to follow from the others. Induction A process through which the premises provide some basis for the conclusion. Deduction A process through which the premises provide conclusive proof for the conclusion.

Argument Indicators: Premise Indicators: Conclusion Indicators: should

since

therefore

must

because

hence

ought

for

thus

necessarily

as

so

in as much as

consequently

for the reason that

it follows that

first

one may infer one may conclude

When dealing with persuasive writing, it will be helpful for you to outline the argument by premises and conclusions. By looking at the structure of the argument, it is easy to spot logical error.

Example 1 "Universities are full of knowledge. The freshmen bring a little in, and the seniors take none away, and knowledge accumulates." --Harvard President A. L. Lowell Premise 1 Premise 2 Premise 3 Conclusion

Freshmen bring a little (knowledge) in Seniors take none away Knowledge accumulates Universities are full of knowledge

Example 2 (Here, the conclusion of one argument is used as a premise in another. This is very common.) "Even though there may be a deceiver of some sort, very powerful and very tricky, who bends all his efforts to keep me perpetually deceived, there can be no slightest doubt that I exist, since he deceives me; and let him deceive me as much as he will, he can never make me be nothing as long as I think I am something. Thus, after having thought well on this matter, and after examining all things with care, I must finally conclude and maintain that this proposition: I am, I exist, is necessarily true every time that I pronounce it or conceive it in my mind." -- René Descartes, Meditations Argument 1 Premise 1: Conclusion of Argument 1 Argument 2 Premise 1: Conclusion:

To be deceived ... I must exist When I think that I exist I cannot be deceived about that I am, I exist, is necessarily true ... .

Reaching Logical Conclusions This article is reprinted from pages 78-79 of Pearson-Allen: Modern Algebra, Book One. In the book it is one of several between-chapter articles that add interest and provoke thought on subjects related to the topics discussed in the text. Consider the two statements: 1. Any member of a varsity squad is excused from physical education. 2. Henry is a member of the varsity football squad.

Our common sense tells us that if we accept these two statement as true, then we must accept the following third statement as true: 3. Henry is excused from physical education. We say that the third statement follows logically from the other two. In drawing logical conclusions it does not matter whether the statements we accept as true are reasonable or sensible. This is because we depend entirely upon the form of the statements and not upon what we are talking about. Thus, if we accept the following statements as true: 1. All whales are mammals; 2. All mammals are warm-blooded animals; 3. All warm-blooded animals are subject to colds; then we must conclude that 4. All whales are subject to colds. Do you see that statements 1, 2, and 3 are arranged in logical order ? In the diagram at the right the set of whales is represented by W, the set of mammals by M, the set of warm-blooded animals by B, the set of animals subject to colds by C, and the set of all animals by A. The diagram shows that W is a subset of M as required by statement 1, that M is a subset of B as required by statement 2, and that B is a subset of C as required by statement 3. The only conclusion that uses all of our given statements is that W is a subset of C, as asserted by statement 4.

Had our third statement been "no warm-blooded animals are subject to colds," our diagram would have been the one shown at the right and our conclusion would have been "no whales are subject to colds."

If you have read Alice's Adventures in Wonderland or Through the Looking-Glass, you know that author Lewis Carroll delights in giving sets of nonsense statements which lead to logical conclusions. One such set is the following: Babies are illogical; Nobody is despised who can manage a crocodile; Illogical persons are despised.

When these statements are arranged in logical order we have: 1. Babies are illogical; 2. Illogical persons are despised; 3. Nobody is despised who can manage a crocodile. From these we can draw the logical conclusion: 4. Babies cannot manage crocodiles.

Fallacies A fallacy is an error of reasoning. It can be used against you in an argument, but if you are familiar with them, you will be able to refute the fallacious argument. Likewise, if you are clever, you can use them to convince others. Fallacies fall into two major categories: Fallacies of Relevance Fallacies of relevance occur when the premises of an argument are irrelevant to the conclusion. Fallacies of Ambiguity Fallacies of ambiguity occur when ambiguous, changeable wording in the propositions can lead to there being more than one meaning in an argument. Here are examples of each of the major fallacies. Reflect upon them and write in a definition that makes sense to you.

Fallacies of Relevance 1. Argumentum ad Bacculum (appeal to force) "Pay back the loan and 10 % daily interest by Thursday, or be sure that you have you hospital insurance paid up." 2. Argumentum ad Hominem (abusive) "Don't believe anything John says; he's a nerd."

3. Argumentum ad Hominem (circumstantial) "Of course he thinks fraternities are great. He's a Phi Delta." 4. Argumentum ad Ignorantiam (argument from ignorance) There is no proof that witches exist; therefore, they do not. 5. Argumentum ad Misericordiam (appeal to pity) "Your honor, how can the prosecution dare try to send this poor, defenseless child to jail for the murder of his father and mother. Have a heart; the boy is now an orphan." 6. Argumentum ad Populum "Don't be left out! Buy your Chevette today!" 7. Argumentum ad Vericundiam (appeal to authority) Joe Namath selling pantyhose; Joe DiMaggio selling Mr. Coffee. 8. Accident "What you bought yesterday, you eat today; you bought raw meat yesterday; therefore, you eat raw meat today." 9. Converse Accident (hasty generalization) "That man is an alcoholic. Liquor should be banned." 10. False cause (Post hoc ergo propter hoc) (Many of our superstitions stem from use of this fallacy.) "A black cat crossed Joe's path yesterday, and he died last night. The black cat caused Joe's death." 11. Petitio Principii (begging the question) "It's time to come in the house now, Billy." "Why?" "Because I said so!" "Why?" "Because it's time, and I said so." 12. Complex Question

"Have you given up cheating on exams?" 13. Ignoratio Elenchi (irrelevant conclusion) In a law court, in attempt to prove that the accused is guilty of theft, the prosecution may argue that theft is a horrible crime for anyone to commit.

Fallacies of Ambiguity 1. Equivocation Some dogs have fuzzy ears. My dog has fuzzy ears. My dog is some dog! 2. Amphibole (grammatical construction) "Woman without her man would be lost." or "Save Soap and Waste Paper." 3. Accent "We should not speak ill of our friends." 4. Composition "Each part of this stereo weighs under one pound. This is a very light stereo." 5. Division "Purdue is a great engineering school. Mike went there; he must be a great engineer."

Listen to your roommate, the TV, and even your profs. You'll be amazed how many fallacies we encounter each day. More important, check your papers. Does your argument have premises and conclusions stated properly? Have you been guilty of fallacious reasoning?

Improprieties A functional impropriety is the use of a word as the wrong part of speech. The wrong meaning for a word can also be impropriety.

Mark improprieties in the following phrases and correct them in the blanks at the right. If you find none, write C in the blank. Example: (occupation) hazards -- occupational 1. reforming institution policies 2. percent aging students by grades 3. dead trees as inhabitants for birds 4. an initiate story about a young girl 5. a recurrence theme in literature 6. a wood chisel 7. a wood baseball bat 8. a frivolity conversation on the weather 9. a utopia hideaway of alpine villas 10. a utilize room complete with workbench 11. the unstable chemical compounds 12. the unschooled labor force 13. the vandals who rapined Rome 14. an erupting volcano crevassing the hills 15. criticism writing which is often abstract 16. abstracted beyond understanding 17. classified as an absorbent 18. a handwriting letter 19. banjoed their way to the top ten 20. a meander stream

21. hoboing across the country 22. holidayed the time away 23. the redirective coming from the officer 24. grain-fed slaughter cattle 25. ivy tendoned to the walls

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When sentences, ideas, and details fit together clearly, readers can follow along easily, and the writing is coherent. The ideas tie together smoothly and clearly. To establish the links that readers need, you can use the methods listed here.

Repetition of a Key Term or Phrase This helps to focus your ideas and to keep your reader on track. Example: The problem with contemporary art is that it is not easily understood by most people. Contemporary art is deliberately abstract, and that means it leaves the viewer wondering what she is looking at.

Synonyms Synonyms are words that have essentially the same meaning, and they provide some variety in your word choices, helping the reader to stay focused on the idea being discussed. Example: Myths narrate sacred histories and explain sacred origins. These traditional narratives are, in short, a set of beliefs that are a very real force in the lives of the people who tell them.

Pronouns This, that, these, those, he, she, it, they, and we are useful pronouns for referring back to something previously mentioned. Be sure, however, that what you are referring to is clear. Example: When scientific experiments do not work out as expected, they are often considered failures

until some other scientist tries them again. Those that work out better the second time around are the ones that promise the most rewards.

Transitional Words There are many words in English that cue our readers to relationships between sentences, joining sentences together. See the handout on Transitional Devices (Connecting Words) at http://owl.english.purdue.edu/handouts/general/gl_transition.html. There you'll find lists of words such as however, therefore, in addition, also, but, moreover, etc. Example: I like autumn, and yet autumn is a sad time of the year, too. The leaves turn bright shades of red and the weather is mild, but I can't help thinking ahead to the winter and the ice storms that will surely blow through here. In addition, that will be the season of chapped faces, too many layers of clothes to put on, and days when I'll have to shovel heaps of snow from my car's windshield.

Sentence Patterns Sometimes, repeated or parallel sentence patterns can help the reader follow along and keep ideas tied together. Example: (from a speech by President John F. Kennedy) And so, my fellow Americans: ask not what your country can do for you--ask what you can do for your country.

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Transitional devices are like bridges between parts of your paper. They are cues that help the reader to interpret ideas in the way that you, as a writer, want them to understand. Transitional devices help you carry over a thought from one sentence to another, from one idea to another, or from one paragraph to another with words or phrases. And finally, transitional devices link your sentences and paragraphs together smoothly so that there are no abrupt jumps or breaks between ideas. There are several types of transitional devices, and each category leads your reader to make certain connections or assumptions about the areas you are connecting. Some lead your reader forward and imply the "building" of an idea or thought, while others make your reader compare ideas or draw conclusions from the preceding thoughts. Here is a list of some common transitional devices that can be used to cue your reader in a given way.

To Add: and, again, and then, besides, equally important, finally, further, furthermore, nor, too, next, lastly, what's more, moreover, in addition, first (second, etc.),

To Compare: whereas, but, yet, on the other hand, however, nevertheless, on the other hand, on the contrary, by comparison, where, compared to, up against, balanced against, vis a vis, but, although, conversely, meanwhile, after all, in contrast, although this may be true

To Prove: because, for, since, for the same reason, obviously, evidently, furthermore, moreover, besides, indeed, in fact, in addition, in any case, that is

To Show Exception: yet, still, however, nevertheless, in spite of, despite, of course, once in a while, sometimes

To Show Time: immediately, thereafter, soon, after a few hours, finally, then, later, previously, formerly, first (second, etc.), next, and then

To Repeat: in brief, as I have said, as I have noted, as has been noted,

To Emphasize: definitely, extremely, obviously, in fact, indeed, in any case, absolutely, positively, naturally, surprisingly, always, forever, perennially, eternally, never, emphatically, unquestionably, without a doubt, certainly, undeniably, without reservation

To Show Sequence: first, second, third, and so forth. A, B, C, and so forth. next, then, following this, at this time, now, at this point, after, afterward, subsequently, finally, consequently, previously, before this, simultaneously, concurrently, thus, therefore, hence, next, and then, soon

To Give an Example: for example, for instance, in this case, in another case, on this occasion, in this situation, take the

case of, to demonstrate, to illustrate, as an illustration, to illustrate

To Summarize or Conclude: in brief, on the whole, summing up, to conclude, in conclusion, as I have shown, as I have said, hence, therefore, accordingly, thus, as a result, consequently, on the whole, For information about using many of these words and phrases, see the Purdue OWL handout Sentence Variety

Conciseness: Methods of Eliminating Wordiness Brought to you by the Purdue University Online Writing Lab at http://owl.english.purdue.edu

For practice editing sentences to make them more concise, see our exercises on this topic at http://owl.english.purdue.edu/handouts/general/gl_conciseEX1.html

1. Eliminate unnecessary determiners and modifiers Writers sometimes clog up their prose with one or more extra words or phrases that seem to determine narrowly or to modify the meaning of a noun but don't actually add to the meaning of the sentence. Although such words and phrases can be meaningful in the appropriate context, they are often used as "filler" and can easily be eliminated. Wordy Any particular type of dessert is fine with me. Balancing the budget by Friday is an impossibility without some kind of extra help. More Concise Any dessert is fine with me. Balancing the budget by Friday is impossible without extra help. Here's a list of some words and phrases that can often be pruned away to make sentences clearer:

kind of sort of type of specific

really basically for all intents and purposes particular

definitely actually generally individual

Wordy For all intents and purposes, American industrial productivity generally depends on certain factors that are really more psychological in kind than of any given technological aspect. More Concise American industrial productivity depends more on psychological than on technological factors.

2. Change phrases into single words Using phrases to convey meaning that could be presented in a single word contributes to wordiness. Convert phrases into single words when possible. Wordy

The employee with ambition... The department showing the best performance... Jeff Converse, our chief of consulting, suggested at our last board meeting the installation of microfilm equipment in the department of data processing. As you carefully read what you have written to improve your wording and catch small errors of spelling, punctuation, and so on, the thing to do before you do anything else is to try to see where a series of words expressing action could replace the ideas found in nouns rather than verbs. More Concise The ambitious employee... The best-performing department... At our last board meeting, Chief Consultant Jeff Converse suggested that we install

microfilm equipment in the data processing department. As you edit, first find nominalizations that you can replace with verb phrases.

3. Change unnecessary that, who, and which clauses into phrases Using a clause to convey meaning that could be presented in a phrase or even a word contributes to wordiness. Convert modifying clauses into phrases or single words when possible. Wordy

The report, which was released recently... All applicants who are interested in the job must... The system that is most efficient and accurate... More Concise The recently released report... All job applicants must... The most efficient and accurate system...

4. Avoid overusing expletives at the beginning of sentences Expletives are phrases of the form it + be-verb or there + be-verb. Such expressions can be rhetorically effective for emphasis in some situations, but overuse or unnecessary use of expletive constructions creates wordy prose. Take the following example: "It is imperative that we find a solution." The same meaning could be expressed with this more succinct wording: "We must find a solution." But using the expletive construction allows the writer to emphasize the urgency of the situation by placing the word imperative near the beginning of the sentence, so the version with the expletive may be preferable. Still, you should generally avoid excessive or unnecessary use of expletives. The most common kind of unnecessary expletive construction involves an expletive followed by a noun and a relative clause beginning with that, which, or who. In most cases, you can create a more concise sentence by eliminating the expletive opening, making the noun the subject of the sentence, and eliminating the relative pronoun. Wordy

It is the governor who signs or vetoes bills. There are four rules that should be observed: ... There was a big explosion, which shook the windows, and people ran into the street. More Concise The governor signs or vetoes bills. Four rules should be observed:... A big explosion shook the windows, and people ran into the street.

5. Use active rather than passive verbs See our document on active and passive voice for a more thorough explanation of this topic. It is located at http://owl.english.purdue.edu/handouts/grammar/g_actpass.html Wordy

An account was opened by Mrs. Simms. Your figures were checked by the research department. More Concise Mrs. Simms opened an account. The research department checked your figures.

6. Avoid overusing noun forms of verbs Use verbs when possible rather than noun forms known as nominalizations. Sentences with many nominalizations usually have forms of be as the main verbs. Using the action verbs disguised in nominalizations as the main verbs--instead of forms of be--can help to create engaging rather than dull prose. Wordy

The function of this department is the collection of accounts. The current focus of the medical profession is disease prevention. More Concise This department collects accounts. The medical profession currently focuses on disease prevention.

7. Reword unnecessary infinitive phrases Some infinitive phrases can be converted into finite verbs or brief noun phrases. Making such changes also often results in the replacement of a be-verb with an action verb. Wordy

The duty of a clerk is to check all incoming mail and to record it. A shortage of tellers at our branch office on Friday and Saturday during rush hours has caused customers to become dissatisfied with service. More Concise A clerk checks and records all incoming mail. A teller shortage at our branch office on Friday and Saturday during rush hours has caused customer dissatisfaction.

8. Replace circumlocutions with direct expressions Circumlocutions are commonly used roundabout expressions that take several words to say what could be said more succinctly. We often overlook them because many such expressions are habitual figures of speech. In writing, though, they should be avoided since they add extra words without extra meaning. Of course, occasionally you may for rhetorical effect decide to use, say, an expletive construction instead of a more succinct expression. These guidelines should be taken as general recommendations, not absolute rules. Wordy

At this/that point in time... In accordance with your request... More Concise Now/then... As you requested... Here are some other common circumlocutions that can be compressed into just one word:

the reason for for the reason that owing/due to the fact that in light of the fact that considering the fact that on the grounds that this is why on the occasion of in a situation in which under circumstances in which as regards in reference to with regard to concerning the matter of where ________ is concerned it is crucial that it is necessary that there is a need/necessity for it is important that cannot be avoided is able to has the opportunity to has the capacity for has the ability to it is possible that there is a chance that it could happen that the possibility exists for

=because, since, why

=when

=about

=must, should

=can

=may, might, could

Wordy It is possible that nothing will come of these preparations. She has the ability to influence the outcome. It is necessary that we take a stand on this pressing issue.

More Concise Nothing may come of these preparations. She can influence the outcome We must take a stand on this pressing issue.

9. Omit words that explain the obvious or provide excessive detail Be sure always to consider your readers as you draft and revise your writing. If you find passages that explain or describe in detail what would already be obvious to readers, delete or reword them. Wordy

I received your inquiry yesterday. Yes, we do have... It goes without saying that we are acquainted with your policy on filing tax returns, and we have every intention of complying with the regulations that you have mentioned. Imagine a mental picture of someone engaged in the intellectual activity of trying to learn what the rules are for how to play the game of chess. Baseball, one of our oldest and most popular outdoor summer sports in terms of total attendance at ball parks and viewing on television, has the kind of rhythm of play on the field that alternates between times when players passively wait with no action taking place between the pitches to the batter and then times when they explode into action as the batter hits a pitched ball to one of the players and the player fields it. More Concise Yes, we do have... We intend to comply with the tax-return regulations that you have mentioned. Imagine someone trying to learn the rules of chess. Baseball has a rhythm that alternates between waiting and explosive action.

10. Omit repetitive wording Watch for phrases or longer passages in your writing in which you repeat words with similar meanings. Below are some general examples of unnecessary repetition contrasted with more concise versions, followed by lists and examples of specific redundant word pairs and categories. Wordy

I would appreciate it if you would bring to the attention of your drafting officers the administrator's dislike of long sentences and paragraphs in messages to the field and in other items drafted for her signature or approval, as well as in all correspondence, reports, and studies. Please encourage your section to keep their sentences short. The supply manager considered the correcting typewriter an unneeded luxury. Our branch office currently employs five tellers. These tellers do an excellent job Monday through Thursday but cannot keep up with the rush on Friday and Saturday. More Concise Please encourage your drafting officers to keep sentences and paragraphs in letters, reports, and studies short. Dr. Lomas, the administrator, has mentioned that reports and memos drafted for her approval recently have been wordy and thus timeconsuming. The supply manager considered the correcting typewriter a luxury. Our branch office currently employs five tellers, who do an excellent job Monday through Thursday but cannot keep up with Friday and Saturday rush periods.

Redundant Pairs Many pairs of words imply each other. Finish implies complete, so the phrase completely finish is redundant in most cases. So are many other pairs of words: past memories terrible tragedy various differences end result each individual final outcome basic fundamentals free gift true facts past history important essentials unexpected surprise future plans sudden crisis A related expression that's not redundant as much as it is illogical is very unique.

Since unique means "one of a kind," adding modifiers of degree such as very, so, especially, somewhat, extremely, and so on is illogical. One-of-a-kind-ness has no gradations; something is either unique or it is not. Wordy Before the travel agent was completely able to finish explaining the various differences among all of the many very unique vacation packages his travel agency was offering, the customer changed her future plans. More Concise Before the travel agent finished explaining the differences among the unique vacation packages his travel agency was offering, the customer changed her plans. Redundant Categories Specific words imply their general categories, so we usually don't have to state both. We know that a period is a segment of time, that pink is a color, that shiny is an appearance. In each of the following phrases, the general category term can be dropped, leaving just the specific descriptive word: large in size often times of a bright color heavy in weight period in time round in shape at an early time economics field

of cheap quality honest in character of an uncertain condition in a confused state unusual in nature extreme in degree of a strange type

Wordy During that time period, many car buyers preferred cars that were pink in color and shiny in appearance. The microscope revealed a group of organisms that were round in shape and peculiar in nature. More Concise During that period, many car buyers preferred pink, shiny cars. The microscope revealed a group of peculiar, round organisms.

Non-Sexist Language Brought to you by the Purdue University Online Writing Lab at http://owl.english.purdue.edu The National Council of Teachers of English (NCTE) suggests the following guidelines:

Generic Use Although MAN in its original sense carried the dual meaning of adult human and adult male, its meaning has come to be so closely identified with adult male that the generic use of MAN and other words with masculine markers should be avoided. Examples mankind man's achievements man-made the common man man the stockroom nine man-hours

Alternatives humanity, people, human beings human achievements synthetic, manufactured, machine-made the average person, ordinary people staff the stockroom nine staff-hours

Occupations Avoid the use of MAN in occupational terms when persons holding the job could be either male or female. Examples chairman

businessman fireman mailman steward and stewardess policeman and policewoman congressman

Alternatives coordinator (of a committee or department), moderator (of a meeting), presiding officer, head, chair business executive firefighter mail carrier flight attendant police officer congressional representative

Pronouns Because English has no generic singular--or common-sex--pronoun, we have used HE, HIS, and HIM in such expressions as "the student needs HIS pencil." When we constantly personify "the judge," "the critic," "the executive," "the author," and so forth, as male by using the pronoun HE, we are subtly conditioning ourselves against the idea of a female judge, critic, executive, or author. There are several alternative approaches for ending the exclusion of women that results from the

pervasive use of masculine pronouns. a. Recast into the plural. Example Alternative Give each student his paper as soon as he Give students their papers as soon as they are is finished. finished.

b. Reword to eliminate gender problems. Example Alternative The average student is worried about his The average student is worried about grades. grade.

c. Replace the masculine pronoun with ONE, YOU, or (sparingly) HE OR SHE, as appropriate. Example If the student was satisfied with his performance on the pretest, he took the post-test.

Alternative A student who was satisfied with her or his performance on the pretest took the post-test.

d. Alternate male and female examples and expressions. (Be careful not to confuse the reader.) Example Alternative Let each student participate. Has he had a Let each student participate. Has she had a chance chance to talk? Could he feel left out? to talk? Could he feel left out?

Indefinite Pronouns Using the masculine pronouns to refer to an indefinite pronoun (everybody, everyone, anybody, anyone) also has the effect of excluding women. In all but strictly formal uses, plural pronouns have become acceptable substitutes for the masculine singular. Example Anyone who wants to go to the game should bring his money tomorrow.

Alternative Anyone who wants to go to the game should bring their money tomorrow.

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Go from old to new information Introduce your readers to the "big picture" first by giving them information they already know. Then

they can link what's familiar to the new information you give them. As that new information becomes familiar, it too becomes old information that can link to newer information. The following example sentence is clear and understandable because it uses old information to lead to new information: Every semester after final exams are over, I'm faced with the problem of what to do with books of lecture notes (new information). They (old) might be useful some day, but they just keep piling up on my bookcase (new). Someday, it (old) will collapse under the weight of information I might never need.

Here is a sentence that is not as clear. It moves from new information to old information: Lately, most movies I've seen have been merely second-rate entertainment, but occasionally there are some with worthwhile themes. The rapid disappearance of the Indian culture (new) is the topic of a recent movie (old) I saw.

Did you find the second sentence hard to read or understand? If so, it could be because the old information comes late in the sentence after the new information. A clearer version that moves from old information to new information might look like this: Lately, most movies I've seen have been merely second-rate entertainment, but occasionally there are some with worthwhile themes. One recent movie (old) I saw was about the rapid disappearance of the Indian culture. (new)

Be careful about placement of subordinate clauses Avoid interrupting the main clause with a subordinate clause if the interruption will cause confusion: •

clear (subordinate clause at the end):

Industrial spying is increasing rapidly because of the growing use of computers to store and process corporate information. •

clear (subordinate clause at the beginning):

Because of the growing use of computers to store and process corporate information, industrial spying is increasing rapidly. •

not as clear (subordinate clause embedded in the middle):

Industrial spying,because of the growing use of computers to store and process corporate information, is increasing rapidly.

Use active voice Sentences in active voice are usually easier to understand than those in passive voice because activevoice constructions indicate clearly the performer of the action expressed in the verb. In addition, changing from passive voice to active often results in a more concise sentence. So use active voice unless you have good reason to use the passive. For example, the passive is useful when you don't want to call attention to the doer; when the doer is obvious, unimportant, or unknown; or when passive voice is the conventional style among your readers. For more on this topic, consult our handout on active and passive voice at http://owl.english.purdue.edu/handouts/grammar/g_actpass.html. •

clear (active):

The committee decided to postpone the vote. •

not as clear (passive):

A decision was reached to postpone the vote.

Use parallel constructions When you have a series of words, phrases, or clauses, put them in parallel form (similar grammatical construction) so that the reader can identify the linking relationship more easily and clearly. •

clear (parallel):

In Florida, where the threat of hurricanes is an annual event, we learned that it is important (1) to become aware of the warning signs, (2) to know what precautions to take, and (3) to decide when to seek shelter. •

not as clear (not parallel):

In Florida, where the threat of hurricanes is an annual event, we learned that it is important (1) to become aware of the warning signs. (2) There are precautions to take, and (3) deciding when to take shelter is important. In the second sentence, notice how the string of "things to be aware of in Florida" does not create a parallel structure. Also, notice how much more difficult it is for a reader to follow the meaning of the second sentence compared to the first one.

Avoid noun strings Try not to string nouns together one after the other because a series of nouns is difficult to

understand. One way to revise a string of nouns is to change one noun to a verb. •

unclear (string of nouns):

This report explains our investment growth stimulation projects. •

clearer:

This report explains our projects to stimulate growth in investments.

Avoid overusing noun forms of verbs Use verbs when possible rather than noun forms known as "nominalizations." •

unclear (use of nominalization):

The implementation of the plan was successful. •

clearer:

The plan was implemented successfully. We implemented the plan successfully.

Avoid multiple negatives Use affirmative forms rather than several negatives because multiple negatives are difficult to understand. •

unclear (multiple negatives, passive):

Less attention is paid to commercials that lack human interest stories than to other kinds of commercials. •

clearer:

People pay more attention to commercials with human interest stories than to other kinds of commercials.

Choose action verbs over forms of be When possible, avoid using forms of be as the main verbs in your sentences and clauses. This problem tends to accompany nominalization (see above). Instead of using a be verb, focus on the actions you wish to express, and choose the appropriate verbs. In the following example, two ideas are expressed: 1) that there is a difference between television and newspaper news reporting, and 2) the nature of that difference. The revised version expresses these two main ideas in the two main

verbs. •

Unclear (overuse of be verbs):

One difference between television news reporting and the coverage provided by newspapers is the time factor between the actual happening of an event and the time it takes to be reported. The problem is that instantaneous coverage is physically impossible for newspapers. •

Clearer:

Television news reporting differs from that of newspapers in that television, unlike newspapers, can provide instantaneous coverage of events as they happen.

Avoid unclear pronoun references Be sure that the pronouns you use refer clearly to a noun in the current or previous sentence. If the pronoun refers to a noun that has been implied but not stated, you can clarify the reference by explicitly using that noun. •

Unclear (unclear pronoun reference):

With the spread of globalized capitalism, American universities increasingly follow a corporate fiscal model, tightening budgets and hiring temporary contract employees as teachers. This has prompted faculty and adjunct instructors at many schools to join unions as a way of protecting job security and benefits. •

Clearer:

With the spread of globalized capitalism, American universities increasingly follow a corporate fiscal model, tightening budgets and hiring temporary contract employees as teachers. This trend has prompted faculty and adjunct instructors at many schools to join unions as a way of protecting job security and benefits. •

Unclear (unclear pronoun reference):

Larissa worked in a national forest last summer, which may be her career choice. •

Clearer:

Larissa worked in a national forest last summer; forest management may be her career choice. Larissa worked in a national forest last summer, and she may choose a forest management career.

Using Metaphors in Creative Writing What is a metaphor? The term metaphor meant in Greek "carry something across" or "transfer," which suggests many of the more elaborate definitions below: •

a comparison between two things, based on resemblance or similarity, without using "like" or "as"

most dictionaries and textbooks

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the act of giving a thing a name that belongs to something else

Aristotle

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the transferring of things and words from their proper signification to an improper similitude for the sake of beauty, necessity, polish, or emphasis

Diomedes

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a device for seeing something in terms of something else

Kenneth Burke

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understanding and experiencing one thing in terms of another

John Searle

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a simile contracted to its smallest dimensions

Joseph Priestly

Related terms extended or telescoping metaphor: A sustained metaphor.

The teacher descended upon the exams, sank his talons into their pages, ripped the answers to shreds, and then, perching in his chair, began to digest.

implied metaphor: A less direct metaphor.

John swelled and ruffled his plumage (versus John was a peacock)

mixed metaphor: The awkward, often silly use of more than one metaphor at a time. To be avoided!

The movie struck a spark that massaged the audience's conscience.

dead metaphor: A commonly used metaphor that has become over time part of ordinary language.

tying up loose ends, a submarine sandwich, a branch of government, and most clichés