Gwen Watego(new).docx

Hwag kang maglagay ng comma sa address Unnecessary yung parenthesis dito

Napakahaba ng intro mo sis. Iklian mo lang around 25 words ok na.

NOTE: Masyadong mahaba ang sulat mo friend at mahirap intindihin kasi wala kang topic sentence/signposting sa umpisa ng paragraph mo. Sa case note na to dapat tingnan mo lang yung appropriate na phrase para sa General Practitioner. Ano ba dapat nyang malaman yung relevant sa profession nya. Kapag nagpplan ka ng letter isipin mo na 200 words so sa intro dapat maximum na ang 30 words at conclusion around 30 words din so sa body dapat nsa 140 words. Minsan kasi wala sa haba kundi ang appropriateness ng letter para sa receiver.

General Practitioner Aboriginal and Torres Strait Islander Community Health Service 55 Annerley Rd Woolongabba 4102

Dear Doctor, Re: Ms. Gwen Watego, DOB: 25/03/1972

I am writing to refer this patient, an Aboriginal widow who requires further investigation for possible diabetes milletus 2. In regards to her health history, she had pneumonia a year ago. She is unsure about her family medical history as she does not know about her parents. Generally, she is overweight and does minimal exercise. She smokes 15 cigarettes daily and a moderate drinker. She has no known allergies as well as no current medication. Ms. Watego was presented in the accident and emergency department following a fall outside the shopping centre. Fortunately, there is no LOC and head injury. She sustained grazed on both palms in which they were cleansed with antiseptic. Whilst in the hospital, she complains of pain on her feet. On examination, the left and right plantar surface have ulcer and callus respectively. Random glucose test was done which showed 11 mmol/L indicating the possibility of diabetes. Risks and benefits of quitting smoking has been tackled, and she has been referred to Quitline. I would be grateful if you will furtherly assess and manage this patient. If you require further information, please do not hesitate to contact me.

Yours sincerely, Leah H. Valencia RN